The Ordeal - The Conclusion

The ordeal of eternal damnation took place in a confidential location unknown to the inhabitants. 
Devil’s bond-slaves were dying to behold his sighting which was as rare as the meteor falling from the sky.
With a throbbing heart and agitated feet, Emma arrived at the spot.
She could feel the devilish aura spread across. 
After few wobbly strides, she came in front of a colossal wooden door that had a fierce lion engraved on it, along with some symbols from the occult. 
Before she could stretch her hand to knock, the door flung open on its own, Unfolding gory darkness ahead of her.
With each step into the darkness, a partial illumination guided her clueless feet into the heart of the atrium where the sacrament was to be conducted.
She could hear some freaky babel as she was nearing the devils workshop.
As she walked a little further, her eyes observed men and women dressed in hideous costumes holding candles in their hands, bearing a sinister smile.
“EMMA..”, a husky voice, conjured her to the center of the atrium. As she went ahead, she saw a huge circle with star inside it touching the circle on all the sides.
She was in complete daze. As a CURSE, Satan came in front of her.
Standing tall, looking straight into her eyes.
Emma was transfixed by his strong presence. He held her hand and took her into the circle.Few apostles surrounded them in a circular formation.
Satan lured Emma to get 
intimate with him and finally ripping her soul out of her body and detaining it for sexual enslavement and persecution for a lifetime. 

Comments

  1. Unknown1 July 2017 at 08:16

    Great article.. loved it .. was looking forward to how it ends .. d way every temptation ends .. lures us into falling in it's trap and then v r bound by it .. Good work .. keep writing.. :)

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  2. Unknown1 July 2017 at 08:24

    Thank you so much dear bijal for pouring your heart out. It really took a lot of efforts to sketch and paint the final work. This is the first work which is complete from start to end. Glad to know that I could pull it .

    Thank you again.

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  3. Nitesh Agrawal1 July 2017 at 11:32

    nice article.....

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  4. Unknown1 July 2017 at 11:33

    Thank you, Mr.Agrawal :)

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  5. Kalpesh jain1 July 2017 at 11:45

    Nice one

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  6. Unknown1 July 2017 at 11:51

    Thanks Kevin !!

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  7. Unknown1 July 2017 at 21:21

    Interesting end...meaningful as well

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  8. Unknown1 July 2017 at 21:36

    Neat !!

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  9. Anonymous2 July 2017 at 10:20

    Horror at it's best .. could get the feel nd picture out of it. superb
    Yogesh

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  10. Unknown2 July 2017 at 10:35

    Thanks for liking it Yogesh.
    Cheers :)

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  11. Unknown2 July 2017 at 22:09

    Amazing story n climax....keep it up... good luck for the next article..... keep writing....

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  12. Unknown2 July 2017 at 22:50

    Hey Vishmita, thank you so much. I am glad you liked it. New work is up in progress will share soon.
    Cheers :)

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  13. Unknown2 July 2017 at 23:57

    Awesome!! Looking forward for more such creative writing.

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    1. Unknown3 July 2017 at 00:02

      :)
      Thanks Sujata, More stuff on its way , Soon !!

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  14. Unknown3 July 2017 at 00:03

    You were instrumental in making me scratch my head and pen down the conclusion. Feels good to have completed the The Ordeal.
    Thanks for the appreciation.

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  15. Aniket dalvi3 July 2017 at 20:45

    Good write.. Bro..

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  16. Unknown3 July 2017 at 21:17

    Thanks bro :)

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  17. ambika4 July 2017 at 06:19

    Intense and beautiful are limited words to describe it!

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  18. Unknown4 July 2017 at 06:52

    I am pleased by your praises. Thank you so much, Ambika

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  19. Unknown4 July 2017 at 19:30

    It's dark alrighty, but satan isn't always So devilish.the joy of freedom and the illusion of free will is a deception used by both the entities at work.

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  20. Unknown4 July 2017 at 20:47

    Thanks for you input Ankit.if you look closely at the article. I have decorated Satan here and Emma is lured by Satan's pull. Deception is inevitable because Emma doesn't know what's in store for her.

    Cheers !!

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  21. Sujay5 July 2017 at 06:02

    Beautifully drafted horror. Good one yogendra

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  22. Unknown5 July 2017 at 06:13

    Thank you Sujay much appreciated.

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  23. Unknown8 July 2017 at 23:06

    It is really nice how you portrayed the real-world so-called-mean-love story in this evil form. It's undoubted that a powerful personality can lure any soul at first, and the soul realizes when it's late. Good work! :)

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  24. Unknown9 July 2017 at 04:51

    :)
    Thanks Shibani.
    I am glad you could connect.

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  25. Unknown12 July 2017 at 03:51

    Enduring!

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  26. Anonymous4 August 2017 at 23:55

    Good writing - but you need to show us details - not tell us.

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    1. Unknown5 August 2017 at 00:34

      Show don't tell , right???

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    2. Nathan Wolf5 August 2017 at 10:56

      Yes. Let us see what is happening - don't tell us what is happening. Example:

      Emma followed, as if in a a trance, as Satan took her hand in his and drew her into the circle. When his hand touched her body feelings of desire awoke within her. She could feel his lust rising and, to her shock, her sleeping lust was rising to meet hers.

      Emma did not, could not, protest as Satan's fingers unfastened the first button on her blouse. She wanted him to stop. No. She wanted him to continue. Her will surrendered to his desire.

      She shivered with delight flavored by fear as the next button was unlocked. And then the next...

      {{{{AND SO ON}}}}

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